This feels a bit incoherant at times. It sort of works to the story's advantage at times in that the story itself is based on insanity, but other times...well, for instance, I'd recommend bolding scene breakers or something. Simply writing "flashback" in the same font as the rest of the story doesn't do much to seperate the time periods.

Still, it's a nice premise overall, and takes advantage of the characters' personalities.

Sorry for all the spelling and other mistakes that are in the story

LOL andy being retarded

Hahaha! I'm in stiches! This seems just like something that what would happen in the game. You should do more comedy stories!