MAAAGGGGGGIIIIIIIEEEEEEE!

I LOVED THIS!.!.! XD WRITE MORE FICS DANG IT!

XD He slapped him! XDXDXDXDXDXD!

Good story, but the ending confused me a bit.

"Kids reenact our fight and they're wrong."

-Does this mean that this story occurs outside of the show?

"Abyo caught a glimpse of Garu's wrist where he could read mistake."

-Garu cuts? Or did he write it in pen or something?

The ending seemed a bit rushed, Garu and Tobe just sort of randomly passed out.

You also need to work on your grammar a bit more. Do you get your stories beta'd?

Anyways, you have potential as a writer, but you might want to work more on describing things. You shouldn't leave your reader confused.

I want to cry this is a good story

Awwww, that's SOOOO sad, but beautiful! I see the potential writer in you. :)

It's a beautiful story, and I loved EVERY moment of it!

Great job!

Very good story. Poor Tobe.

How sweet! But the paragraphs needs to be separated. It's a little hard to read it. }.}'

Good chap! Can't wait for more! Update soon!

Good story so far. Update soon!

I am likeing it

Awwww, I'd like to hear this. :D

I wonder about the scar that Tobe had. :)