that is good! I love it! Read some of mine, here's the list: The angel of mercy ( Gundam/AC)

Girl's, cat's & Bit-beast( Beyblade)

My dream( Gundam/AC)

The 6th blader(beybalde)

Heero's twin sister ( Gundam/AC).

Ok besides that fact that chapter 1 and 2 are switched around, i thought it was a very good story. you also need to work on u're spelling and you should add something that can be used to tell the difference when someone is talking. Good job _

Ugh! I love this story to death! Sure it could use some editing, but it's still a good story! Keep on going! Wo hoo for Dark Angel! :)