Arale:(grins) I could tell if there was some Shrek parts. The song,the "look at me!" throwing his arms out thing. I know cuz I saw that movie twice in the movies and several times on video. (giggles) I likethe part where they go to dulock and Donkey pulls the lever. Then that weird song comes on. It was so funny!

You don't use a spell checker do you? and that was just to disturbing to be thinking that your chicky thing was acting like donkey and Piccolo like shrek. That's just plain scary.........
still good fic. keep on writing and use a SPELL CHECKER!!!!!

What? Aren't you going to finish the story? You just left all of your readers with a cliff-hanger?

Anyway, you're doing a good job. I like the whole demon-thing that you've got going on here. There aren't that many fanfics out there that go into Piccolo being a demon and all. It's a really good idea, and you should keep it going.

you talk about gohan being like a rabbit on E, just listen to yourself talk and/or watch yourself type.

VERY GOOD! one thing though now this isnt to be rude but agene is spelled Again and grate is spealled great other than that I think it is wonderful i loved the sherk part! it was hillariouse! hope ya have fun at the hot springs ^_~

good story...it's really funny. Please write more soon!

OKEY DAYS! It's about time! This is probably gonna be a hell of a long review, so here goes!

Fav. Lines:

^ “WAITE A MINNET! I have a grate idea!” She cried happily as she limped over to Piccolo’s side “I stick with you! You’re a lean, mean, Green, fighting mashies. With you and me together, we’ll scar the ** out of anyone that crosses us!” she said, striking a dramatic Ginyu force type pose in front of him, with her back pressed up agent his broad chest, but agene cringed from pain. ^

^ “Wow…. Now THAT was REALLY scary!” Piccolos face vaulted. He cocked his head back and scowled at the woman. “And if you don’t mined me saying….,” she continued calmly. “….Your breath smells really nice! Mummmm …..Minty!”

Everyone took a nose dive, while Piccolo stood there in wide eyed shock, a massive sweat drop rolled down the side of his head as she closed her eyes and began to sniff the air. ^

^ “Oh I’ll tell you why… it’s becoz I’m all alone,” She said in a sing song voice, then she went solo and sang…. “There’s none here beside me!! My problems have all gone, there’s none here to deride meeeee!!” she sang striking, gentle poses as not to hurt her self. She sounded grate.... for some one how looked like they had just been in a airplane crash. But the song was just getting on Piccolo’s nerves….

“…..But you gotta have frieeeends….”

“STOP!! SINGING!!!” He bellowed at her, clamping his large hands round the tops of her arms and lifting her off the ground so they were eye level. “Well it’s no wonder you don’t have any friends!” he said, setting her roughly down by his side. She staggered a bit, an looked back up at Piccolo.

“Wow ….,” She smiled at him. “Now only a true friend would be that cruelly honest!” Piccolo was becoming …. Needless to say…. rather stressed out….. ^

^ //WHERE THE HELL DID THAT COME FROM!! **!! That’s it!! When I’ve gotten rid of this woman, I’m going to lock my self in my room at the lookout, and not come back out …… ever agene!!// ^

^ “What!! What do I look like? A taxi service? There is no way in the afterlife that I am going to..” ^

DS: And those were my favorite lines!

MTrunks: ::Looking over review:: This is probably the longest review you've ever done DS

DS: Really? Why thank yousa! ::Cute grin:: Oh, and Piccolo... :P to yousa! Trying to out-do MY evil grins...

Piccolo: ::Storms in:: What was that?!

DS: !_! Weren't yousa supossed to be with Ner'ual?

Piccolo: We finished...now what was that you just did?!

DS: Uh...mesa love yousa?

Piccolo: Nice try! ::Lunges at DS::

DS: Eep! ::Hides behind Mirai::

::Suddenly...someone reaches out and grabs Piccolo!::

Piccolo: What the- ::sees Ner'ual:: Oh, um hi honey! ::Nervous laugh::

MTrunks: 0_0 Did Piccolo just do a nervous laugh and call her honey!?

DS: ::Holding tape recorder:: Yup! Mesa got documentation! This will go nice with those pics mesa have...yipes! ::Runs away with Piccolo chasing her, and Ner'ual chasing him::

MTrunks: 0_0 ::Watching line:: Oooooook then. I guess its up to me to close out this review.

Sincerely (your hunky bishonen),

MTrunks: ::Blushing:: DS!

DS: ::Still running:: Hehehe

MTrunks: -_-

AHEM! Sincerely,
MTrunks

(PS: GET MORE OUT SOON! YOUSA KNOW YOUSA WANT TO!)

So Cooooooool Write More!!!

So Cooooooool Write More!!!

You HAVE to finish this. You have a great story going. And whats this I hear about Shrek being in your next chapter?

Update!!!!! Thank you ^_^

WOW Great Story!!! But why is this woman giving Piccolo that evil grin? Does he know her or did his father? Great suspense please update.

Awesome! I like the whole Queen of Darkness thing. Really good so write more pleeeeaaase.
-DeathStorm ^_^

I agree with that. Nameks must be part plant... Maybe petunias or something...

it was really cool and funny. you need to make more chapters to it!