 Ms. Anonymous 12/28/11 . chapter 5 Saving Michael for last I see. I liked the way added in a little bit of Michael's dream from 'Nightmares', it fitted nicely. Any chance since he didn't go back for Katerina in this story, it could led to another story? Great job as always. |
 OldSFfan 12/26/11 . chapter 5Ah. New intrigue. Michael has a daughter somewhere in East Germany. I look forward to following your new plot line.
-Old SF Fan |
 Riabhach 12/12/11 . chapter 4Love it - very fun reading all the different views of the same event. |
 OldSFfan 12/10/11 . chapter 4Robert,
I so enjoy your writing, but there's too much dialog here directly from the episode. Give us more Dom. For a character who loves to speak, he gets too little to say in the series. And especially, give us more of your own words. I look forward to the next installment of this story.
-Old SF Fan |
 Sirius7 12/9/11 . chapter 4Interesting, as always, and I really love the Hawke/Caitlin and Michael/Marella hinting. The section that's mostly word-for-word from the episode actually comes off as pretty rough, though. I think your writing flows better when you don't bring in large sections of dialogue direct from the episodes, but go with whatever works for you.
Still looking forward to the next bit.
Sirius |
 Ms. Anonymous 12/9/11 . chapter 4 You know, if it was legal for humans to marry helicopters, I think Dom would be the one to do for writing Dom's point of view. Poor guy. He just goes through so much. |
 Ms. Anonymous 12/3/11 . chapter 3 You know, I kinda always thought that Caitlin and Marella would be like sisters. I like the way you added in Marella's and Michael's feelings, it was sweet. Hmm, Marella and Dom conspiring together, interesting, interesting. Caitlin and String will probably end up handcuffed together or on a deserted island (or both). Great chapter, looking forward to more. |
 OldSFfan 12/2/11 . chapter 3It's fun to watch Marella and Michael start to figure it out. It was unfinished business in the series and it feels good to resolve that unresolved chord.
And Cait can use Marella's help getting through to Hawke.
Thanks. I look forward to the coming chapters.
-Old SF Fan |
 Riabhach 12/2/11 . chapter 3Another good chapter - can't wait for the last two. |
 Sirius7 11/30/11 . chapter 3That was a lovely bit of fun... only one question. If Marella took Cait shopping shortly after Cait started at Santini Air (and I'd love to know what cover she used), wouldn't Cait know whether or not Marella was a doctor, or at least show some sign of recognizing her in Hawke and Dom's hospital room?
Sirius |
 Riabhach 11/27/11 . chapter 2Very good chapter - loved Hawke's POV! |
 Sirius7 11/26/11 . chapter 2Very cool, and I liked the minor changes to the first chapter. It helps the story flow better.
Sirius |
 Ms. Anonymous 11/25/11 . chapter 2 Another great chapter, although, I don't think String will be able to get Cait off his mind any time soon. Can't wait for the next chapter. |
 Ms. Anonymous 11/24/11 . chapter 1 Thanks for writing out the point of view(s) for one of my favorite episodes. I always thought that String and Cait breaking Dom out of the hospital was hilarious. You did a really good work, as always, and I'm looking forward to more. I would say happy gobble, gobble day, but I really don't want to think about turkey (or any other food for that matter) right now. |
 Elanquest 11/24/11 . chapter 1Great beginning. You wrote Caitlin with just the right amount of 'awe shucks.' I like the additional scene of the cafe. I can't see Michael as being too happy with Airwolf being unattended in a foreign country though. Hawke and Dom would have done it just to irritate him. How about giving us an insight to that arguement? |