I don't know if you're going to even get this review, but I decided to come back to some of the first Harry Potter fanfics because a lot of the newer ones were annoying me. This is so good, and I just have to congradulate you on how close you were when you wrote this!

Hello. Good day!

Just here to introduce our Rant about...

Why Trunks&Pan (TP) SHOULD NOT be a couple and…

Why Trunks&Marron (TM) SHOULD be a couple.

TYVM. ;D

Point #1: Trunks is WAY WAY older than Pan. (over a decade age difference!) Although it is acceptable to have a slight age difference, here there is much too much of one!

Point #2: The initials (TP) stand for toilet paper. NOT Trunks&Pan. It sounds really stupid, and if you say “I luvvz TP HOMGG11!one!one1six” then you’re just saying you like love toilet paper. That’s just sad.

Point #3: Some TP fans say that Vegeta would like to have his son marrying a saiyan rather than someone a human-android like Marron. But no, Vegeta would have to be related to his life-long rival Goku! Whereas if Trunks marries Marron, Vegeta would be related to the android he couldn’t beat, which is not necessarily a bad thing.

Point #4: Pan sucks $$. Excuse my french.

Point #5: Trunks is WAY WAY older than Pan. Uh, I think I already mentioned that…but it is a very important point! TP fans sometimes make Pan’s age older, but to do that you would have to re-age everyone, unless you think Gohan had her at age, like, 13? Fanfictions totally ruin the ages. I mean, honestly! Pan 16. Bra 16. Marron 17. Trunks 17. Goten 17. WTF is wrong with you people!

BTW, this is constructive criticism.

We are cynical fanfiction reviewers.

Take it to heart.

This is really well written, I don't really like snape but this has made him grow on me slightly

this is really good! i like to see severus in a kinder light

I have always loved this story.

But I like the version on your site more, where Snape tells Harry, and Samantha comes back as a ghost and puts her hand on his shoulder.

Hello there... I would just like to tell you incase you didnt know already that your story was mention in Mapping the World of Harry Potter in the Yer Sir,With Love chapter. Good story Love it!

I wanted to read the first story up for HP and now I've read it. boy isnt tit funy? I mean..Severus? GOoD? oh well.?

Very dramatic, but extremely well written and with a lovely amount of emotion.

OMG! That was so good! please don't take it down.

this was my favorite when i was younger

You gave me shivers up my back, and have you any idea how many times I've read this story? Hundreds. It's beautiful... I adore your writing. (I'm also a huge fan of your site, and have been since I was eight.)

I sent you an email regarding this story, but I thought I would submit an official review. You wrote a dedication on your website following the story, to all the people who had loved and lost, that I thought was absolutely beautiful that I completely relate to, having lost so many people myself. I just wanted to say that you really hit the nail on the head here, and explored realms that even I as a Snape fan didn't think was quite possible. It really touched me. I had tears in my eyes when I finished reading this. I haven't read anything so incredible for a long time. Well done.

I haven't read this in a while...don't take it down, i still read it once in a while

I am an obsessive visitor of your site. I absolutely love this story. It made me cry every time I have read it. I really hope you update your site soon (and do something about that ship list!). You're site is awesome and has inspired me to write much fanfiction of my own, two of which are posted on this site. Thanks for the amazing site!

Oh my god that is soo sad! :'(:'( i'm litterly tearing now ! Why ? Why? Damn shes so stupid ! Stupid blah voldymort i wanna kik his blah. Why couldnt they just take her to Madame Pomphrey fast! Gr plz add more!