This is really interesting. Are you going to continue or is this it?

I'm really diggin' it so far.
Especially how you write Jack. He seems less childish but still very much in character.
Kudos.
I'm thinking a little more action with Naomi, perhaps? It just seems like she's thinking too much. Impulse is not always bad.

Anywho, keep it up.
I await the next chapter!

Great chapter . Can't wait for an update!

Really good so far! Can't wait for more!

This fic has been really fun to read so far! I especially like the interactions between Jack and Naomi. Please update soon!

This is a very well written and creative story! It's very interesting an they all are in character. The only thing I have to complain is, I don't recall you describing what Naiomi looks like. But that's it! Otherwise this story is fantastic and very entertaining! I seriously hope you continue this story!

I really like this story, it's quite interesting!

This is actually cool, i like it!

pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee continueeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee ittttttttttttttttttttttttttt wouldddddddddddddddddddddddd makeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee myyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

dayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

I like it OwO want moar

and no I don't think you should write out the entire showdown. Like you said, it gets tedious reading what you already know. But I'm curious to see what will happen when Chase Young gets in the picture xD

Love Jack, is she going to meet the monks?:)

Wow I love that you used the very under-used concept that the character doesn't have tangible energy when visiting an AU. Personally I'd be fangirling over Jack like...well like Jack fanboys over Chase. But honestly who wouldn't?

I say go for it.

make it yours and do it.

besides its interesting :D