|Reviews for Faster Than The Breeze|
| fanficssuck 12/7/11 . chapter 3
Yay! So happy that this was updated :3
I still love Lacie and now Willow xD Such brilliant characters. I also love the way you've portrayed Ryan, too. When he rubbed his temples was a good example that you know how to write about other people's characters, lol. I think maybe the only bad thing is that you use the names too much, but then again, there was quite a few people in one room then, so it's understandable.
Woo, looking forward to the rest :P
| WolfSummoner93 12/7/11 . chapter 3
well Jack, taking a huge risk letting Lacie stay, eh?
good chapter, can't wait to see the next chapter
| tigrun 12/7/11 . chapter 3
| fghjgklfjghjfkghklfjghjfghkg5 12/6/11 . chapter 2
Masquerade: *Stares up at Lucario* I-I ain't afraid of you!
Me: AHHHHHHH! THE JUICE BOXES!
Masquerade: PTY, no. Please, no.
Me: GREAT CHAPPY! LUV YOU AND MISS YOU PTG!
| Jayvee1669 12/1/11 . chapter 2
Yay! Thank you for accepting my OC!
| ScotSniper 12/1/11 . chapter 2
So Willow is a temporary guardian for Ryan Whats-his-face, must have been a special request...
So how old are these characters? And perhaps give a bit more description. - And give your OC's second names as another means of being referred to;
e.g Willow could also be called "Master/Mr Alexander" referring to someone by their first name usually shows familiarity between characters, so that's something you should consider, especially with character's with wealthier backgrounds.
Oh and remember Willow is extremely rude, particularly to his clients. P
| tigrun 12/1/11 . chapter 2
love your chapter
| fanficssuck 12/1/11 . chapter 2
That was an excellent chapter :P I can't really complain about how you wrote about my OC yet, since he hasn't said or done too much yet, but so far it seems alright :D
At the moment, I'm really loving Lacie aswell, she's such a good character xD This story looks like it's gonna be great, so I can't wait for it to get really started, and see what the OC's are like.
| WolfSummoner93 12/1/11 . chapter 2
Lacie has got some spunk, I like her already. Not bad start, but perhaps try and add some details? Like the surrondings and possbily the feelings of the characters.
Good chapter, can't wait for the next one
| X-Account No Longer In Use-X 12/1/11 . chapter 2
Aw, :( ,She has never had a friend! That's sad! & hmm, I wonder if she'll stay? I like the story so far! keep it up
Oh and can I change Spring's out-fit?
I want it to be a spring green bandanna (like May's) that has a pink heart designed on it, a spring green tank-top with pink hearts designed all over it, a pink skirt, knee-high spring green stockings, and pink shoes! She carries a spring green satchel around to hold her items & such!
| Meteorthunder3 11/30/11 . chapter 1
Well this story seems like it can go anywhere really exciting on what it will turn into I hope you don't mind but I'm sending mine by PM.
| Antonia Ivanevna Braginski 11/30/11 . chapter 1
This... is very interesting. I want to see how this plays out. So. I will submit OC, da?
Name: Riley Klein
Occupation: Traveling Trainer
Apperance: She is tall, at 5' 11", and imtimating. She has pale brown hair that reaches a little over her shoulders with a curl, that is in her words 'annoying', that sticks out on the right side. She has violet eyes and a large nose. She is always seen with a long scarf with the Russian flag printed on it. Her shirts have stuff like 'come to the dark side, we have cookies' printed on them. She has brown cargo pants tucked into black combat boots. She has a pair of glasses that she wears all the time. She wears a sidepack that she holds her laptop.
Personality: She is a happy looking person, smiling and foregiving. She doesn't get angry often. She, when angry, is cold and will beat the hell out of you in a Pokémon battle. She mostly get angry if you insult/laugh at her, her pokémon, or her accent. She normally is kind and caring, going out of her way to help hurt people and pokémon. She loves anime and manga and will use the laptop that she carries in her sidepack.
Story: She was born in Hia Valley, Almia. She then moved around Almia with her parents. While she was at school, her parents died in a car accident that was caused by a patch of ice. She then traveled on her own around Almia until she found Mathea and Aj in their first forms. They then put on shows for money.
Pokémon: Aj Eevee Male Moves: Psychic Psyshock Iron Tail Shadow Claw
Mathea Samurott Female Moves: Shell Blade (uses like an axe) Hydro Cannon Revenge Ariel Ace
Drew Skitty Female Moves: Assist Ice Beam Iron Tail Flamethrower
Jolteon Rien Male Moves: Thunderbolt Thunder Fang Headbutt Energy Ball
Typlosion Male Haru Moves: Flamethrower Hyper Beam Focus Blast Fire Punch
Deino Female Haku Moves: Crunch Dragon Pulse Headbutt Thrash
Other: Speaks with a thick Russian accent
| fghjgklfjghjfkghklfjghjfghkg5 11/30/11 . chapter 1
HIIIIIIIIIIIIII! Well...I won't send in an OC even though I'm your best friend (I still hope you think me that way). But, wow, PTG, you're better than I'll ever be. I'm so proud of you and your writing is amazing! Love you.
| ScotSniper 11/30/11 . chapter 1
Eh, I'll leave Willow to ya, if you need some quality characters. Goodluck PTG. P
Name: Willow "Low" Alexander
Occupation: Odd Jobber (Boss)
Appearance: I'm sure you know. (Profile links D)
Personality: Witty, Sarcastic, rather blunt with what he thinks of people. He also has a tendancy to fight alongside his team for less dangerous battles with the wooden swords he carves.
Story: Rather long and complex story... for now lets keep him rather mysterious, eh? - Well I'll summarize a few things.
- Lost parents in a fire at age of 7
- Employed at Veilstone Dojo for three years, learning to Fletch wooden swords for the members to train with and gaining some experience with them himself.
- Left Dojo at aged 10 and traveled to Kanto, meeting the Dexholders.
- At 14 years old, Willow's old mentor was murdered a band of roaming "Samurai", many members of the dojo were also murdered.
- Sketchy details of what happened next, but it is suspected that the survivors of the Dojo attack and Willow hunted down the band of murderous warriors.
- Worked with the dexholders for another few years before settling in Viridian to set up shop, although he does travel abroad. Leaving the shop in the care of his employees.
Rylte (M)- Riolu Lvl 96 (You know him quite well, the epic insane Riolu.)
Glade (M)- Pidgeot Lvl 74 (Willow's means of aerial transport or "Flyer")
Volte (M)- Electavire Lvl 89 (A Powerhouse on Willow's team)
Glare (M) - Sceptile Lvl 62 ( A very agile and tactical Pokemon or "Cutter")
Vaporie (F) - Vaporeon Lvl 78 (Willow's means of water transportation and other uses related to water or "Surfer".)
Vulcane (M) Magmortar Lvl 87 (Another Powerhouse of Willow's team.)
| Fornara 11/30/11 . chapter 1
Um, would 'wow' be appropriate to say? This was really good, even though it was short. I can't wait to see more! (Oh yeah - I was going to submit an OC, but then I saw the mob already trying to get in. xD)