great work and love the castle in the mind idea. It would be interesting to see more characters, maybe like the angel Kyoko played in the PV with Sho?

I like this idea of them liveing in her soul type of thing. It's rather original and interesting. Id like it if u wrote an actual longer story based on this fact.

Kyoko's mind is a rather scary place. Excellent.

Oooh! This is great. But can someone tell me why "Young Kuon" isn't in there? I reeeeeeeeeeeally want him in this story. Maybe Setsu could find him in a different room somewhere or something. Oh yeah! What about the Angel? Though she isn't necessary she certainly would be useful. Keep up the good work!

All of the characters Kyouko plays are so strong, it's really fun to see how they interact with one another. I thought it was also very appropriate that they were in a fairytale castle. That just screams Kyouko!

Thanks for the enjoyable read! :D

I think this can get real interesting real fast. : ) Setsu is just as strong-willed as Natsu, and not as easily dismissed by Ren (as a persona, since he would never accept Kyoko as acting like Natsu to be her real self/feelings, but Setsu's adoration and love might slip past his guard long enough to create some chaos). Looking forward to more!

I love this story soooo much! Are you really intending to make it oneshort with this ending? but I want moreI think other than Mio, Natsu and Setsu, Kyoko also possess Kuon soul and the angel is considered one of her soul too (?). This is a really really nice work. Thank you for giving me this happiness _

LOL...awesome and I totally agree with you...they would tried to killed each other and with Setsuka worrying about Cain then she would most likely caused havoc for Kyoko soul, but then again both Kyoko/Setsu worrying about Ren/Cain I could see Setsu getting her way. (*_*)

This was definitely worth the read. I think you pegged the three characters perfectly and I totally agree. They would hate each other. It made me sad though to think of such vibrant creations being locked away forever. I wonder if over time, their images would slowly fade. Would the characters endure the more influence they achieve in the real world? You made me think of a number of speculative possibilities so thank you.

Itz awesome xD I'm a big fan of ur stories... So far I have read 2 but they r mad good! I like the last dance... My son's father... I find them soooo cool. Bye bye xD

Loved the concept. I know you said this is going to be a one shot but still I am hoping you make this a Multi chapter story. I mean it has SO MUCH potential for a great story. The idea is wonderful and I'm really excited by it. It is no wonder you just had to let it out. Anyway, the decision is still entirely up to you since I am merely an expectator taking a peek. Hehe ;)

Nice! Where is the Kuon persona? I'd love to see interaction between him and setsu... Plus, setsu might wander why there is a male persona within this KYOKO person. Well that, or recognize a younger nicer nii-san, laughs. Or maybe she could stumble on a memory or a grudge... wow this is inspiring! *employs small voice* Maybe you could continue it with setsu exploring this new world abd meeting these people? Plus her getting "let out" by Kyoko.

Anyhow, I love your fic! thanks for writing it

Brilliant. I love POV and Slice of Life pieces. It's nice to see you continuing to write. You're very good at poetry and evoking imagery.

FYI: I'm also enjoying Last Dance.

Hilarious. Though I am curious where the Kyurara commercial Kyoko is. And Bo. I like the idea of Kyoko's different characters having their own personalities. Though keeping Setsu locked away forever is going to be hard.

Thanks for the post.

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