Cool story, i want to see what happens next, so please keep writing!

Well since I don't want Diablo to rip my backbone out of my. . . u back and suck out my soul (I might need that), I'll review your fanfiction, (also by persuasion of your little email.) : )

Anyway. Nice and suspenseful though a lot of images of body parts and organs outside the body when the Huntresses got slaughtered. (Throws up.)-(Just kidding.)

Anyway. I'm just being silly. I really want to know about the Merchant. At first I thought it was Gheed. But he is too greedy to be evil, right? Maybe Marius? Warriv? I don't know? Tell me! I must know!

Also I wonder if we will ever meet that Barbarian who witnessed the other Amazon's death. Have fun and may you get many reviews because I think people like to keep their backbones. (I don't know about their souls, but backbones are definatly a nessessity.)

: )

For a first piece of fanfiction, this is good. Though the dialogue and description is a bit bland, and your sentence structure is slightly skewed, there's still time for improvement. What I recommend is getting an editor of sorts - a close friend or something that you know and trust that can point out mistakes and tell you how to correct them.

Anyway, you show a lot of potential. Keep writing!

Wow nice story.

I like how something as little as.

"Vidala Rig" in a merchants window

can have such a history and background.

Nice keep up the work