Overall this was pretty good. You've planted some seeds in this story that will hopefully sprout greater stories in the future. I think the plot has promise, and I especially enjoyed the first chapter; your descriptions of how circumstances "conveniently" coalesced to draw Link onwards were well done.

If you ever have a mind to edit your work, I would go back and look at your sentence structure. There were points in which your sentences did not flow smoothly, or were worded too hurriedly. The times I write in a "too hurried" fashion are when I've been writing for a long while and no longer am giving the story the attention I did at the beginning. I'm wondering if this happened to you? If so, the end of the story deserves the same meticulous care you obviously devoted to the beginning. Flesh things out, provide context, and take your time. Your work will only improve as a result.

finish it man !

This was a truly excellent and thoughtful story, with an original plot and...oh, I might as well give up the act. By Din, (who says i can't talk like this?) FINISH IT!

I love this plot. Fantasy's always been my thing. :) This is absolutely great. The only thing that really bothered me was the overuse of the word "source." Not a big deal. I can't wait to read the next part.

Decent Zelda writers are rare, I'm sick of people combining worlds. This was normal, I can't wait till I'm done with mine)

OMFG THAT WAS THE BEST ZELDA STORY-THE ONLY ZELDA STORY-I HAVE READ ON THIS SITE BUT HELL IT WAS GOOD ANYWAY WRITE SOME MORE DAMMIT CAUSE IT WAS GOOD!

VERY good! It is about time I get my opinion up here. Okay: The only reason I didn't give you a ten is because I felt like you hurried in a couple of chapters and confused me a bit. I can see the images; the grammar, spelling, heck- you actually have a good vocabulary!- and all in all, this is a story worth reading! GOOD JOB!

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Good gads! I loved the words you used, the whole story flowed beautifully, the characters were written realistically and the plot is marvelous, and I'm only on the first part!

Hey, I loved your story, Its better then anything i could write, I would love to read more, Keep Writing, hehe, ) *