Nice story, just a suggestion, maybe cut down the swearing and language a little bit?

Fab! You're the best!

Good job. You're so skilled.

Cool cliff hanger. Like the way you portray the heroine.

Cool story! You're doing amazing. There is a continuity error though. Mariko Anzai, aka the human host of eve in the novel actually survived the ordeal at the end of the book. Never mind about this, you're still doing well though.

Great chapter again! You write so professionally like a master! You're the king! Oh, I forgot something, I need to put you as favourite!

Well written story so far! It is really suspenseful and faithful to parasite eve. You are a such a talented writer! Keep up the fabulous work!

Well done so far! Your novelisation is really great, please keep up, if you want to. It's good!

Good! I've never played the game, but from what you've described, it sounds like a cool plot

Great novelisation so far! Hope it continues! You've really gotten me into the characters.

All I can say is one single word:

Fabulous!

i love it please continue writing !

As a fan of Parasite Eve I wish for you to continue! Though I must agree that there needs to be more spacing.

Very good. Keep up the good work.

I've been reading your story for a while now using my phone.. But now that I read it through my laptop, I notice you didn't separate the conversations.

I would suggest leave a blank line before the next person is talk so it'll be better when reading the story otherwise it's a little messy to read.

For example,

"I… I asked them to bring me here… so please… d… don't blame them…" he muttered. "And who the hell are you?" Dr. Klamp retorted.

It'll be better if you do this instead,

"I… I asked them to bring me here… so please… d… don't blame them…" he muttered.

"And who the hell are you?" Dr. Klamp retorted.

..Just saying..