|Reviews for Generation X!|
| Mike N 12/26/11 . chapter 2
Hey, I was just checking out the story as a fellow Gen X fan. I'm going to give you a straight-forward critique, so hopefully, you'll find it helpful!
First, you have a premise for a good story. However, it is kind of abrupt. Where does it occur in continuity? Why are Chamber, Skin, Banshee, and Penance missing? When did they relocate to Malibu, CA? Who are Laser and Marvel Boy? All I'm getting at here is to take some time to introduce your story, characters, and plot, helping the reader understand where you are in the series, and understand how the team got to where they are.
The OCs are interesting, but it's obvious they are "author inserts." What I mean by that is that they are characterized versions of the author! Now, this isn't a bad thing, but I would strongly advise not to make them the "deus ex machina" of every chapter. What I mean is to not make those characters the main stars of every chapter, with the best powers, always beating the old schoolers, always perfect. It's a team story, so dedicate the time to develop and emphasize all of your characters.
I would also advise a bit more narrative. Paint the picture for the reader! Help me to see the scene you're painting, as well as "see" the characters. Honestly, I'm not sure what your OCs actually look like.
You do have potential for a great story! I think these few items will bolster your story and writing skills! And if you're not sure what I'm talking about, check out my story, Generation X: Next Class. It's funny, we both have a telekinetic...mine is named Marvel though. It covers all of the things I pointed out, sans grammatical errors here and there. And if you need a beta reader, let me know!
| Count Garnet 12/17/11 . chapter 2
The Oc are amazingly cool i hope they get powerful to beat the evildoers! please continue
| They call me Bruce 12/8/11 . chapter 1
Good fanfic here, fella.
| Zanzibar Chocolate 12/4/11 . chapter 1
For one I can say I really like the new recruits, I think their powers are individually creative.
As far as personality goes with the characters it is geat!
Emma frost in love? Woah...with Beast...more woah!
Keep up the Good Work!
| Count Garnet 12/4/11 . chapter 1
Wow Deadly i knew you had a amazing imagination but this amazing I like the way You put the people in your fic please continue :)