The tory is very nice. But, when are you going to introduce Hitomi? Other than that the story is really good.

i was supposed to review this a very long time ago but do to technical problems i couldn't! hey, better late than never!

It is very interesting so far and it has certainly intrigued me! I was hoping though for a little more on Hitomi and how she was coping etc. but maybe in the next chapter?

Well done though and hope to read more soon!

I see what you mean. This rewrite seems to have very little likeness to its previous form. Ah, well, it's interesting enough. Continue.

Hmm... I've never the original version, if there ever was one, but that's okay. I like this one just fine. It's quite good and I like your introduction of the little Rayin. Hope you'll write again soon...

Yeah,Much better than the original. Keep writing!

-Lucifer