I love what you have done so far. I hope you update soon.

I wanna see a lot more of this!

We need more Malik/Jensen fanfic out there. Please keep going D:

The relationship between Jensen and Malik was awesome, but then everything became so complicated and deviated from the couple XD :c

Yeah, this one was much better. I guess I wasn't the only one choking on the giant-block-o-text. 100 percent improvement. Well done.

(tongue firmly in cheek) I regret to inform you that you are suffering from a critical case of Giant-block-o-text-itis, most likely caused by Paragraph-breaks?-what-are-those? syndrome. Fortunately, this is easily remedied by keeping a couple things firmly in mind.

1) Dialogue gets it's own paragraph.

2) When the speaker changes, it starts a new paragraph.

This should clear up most of the ailment. ;-D

Also...WTF? Arming your prisoner with live ordnance? Taped to his hand or not, what if he decides death while taking you with him is preferable to capture? Sorry, I gotta throw the BS flag on that one.

As well as Jensen freaking out about facing 12 mooks with only a pistol and his take-down system (and what about his typhoon system or his cloaking system)? Wouldn't be the first time that happened. Okay, so you want to add some realism. Fair enough...except for the above wisdom-check failure.

Other than that, it's an interesting story.

P.S.: comments should be read as being glib, not snide. Sorry if they seemed that way.

Nicely written, I hope to hear more 3

It is a very interesting story. I look forward to see how you will develop it. :) Thank for the read and good job so far.

Ha! Omg. I'll bet Sarif knows about them. He totally knows. I nearly choked on my drink I was laughing so hard at what Sarif thought was a "poor presentation" bahahaha! One more chapter to go, as I'm assuming you've stopped writing.

Thanks for the few chapters! This story was good, and it had a lot of potential. I enjoyed it. Thankyou. I'll take Adam/Faridah wherever I can get it.

Hey, I signed up just to review this. Are writing/publishing the rest of it? It sounded like you had #4 almost done, maybe you could release that.
I'm sure that, for every person that takes the time to sign up and review, there are a ton of unregistered readers. It would be great if you could continue this as I'm finding it well written, but most of all very interesting.

Well, I'm definitely interested in where this goes from here. Honestly, I wish you hadn't decided to do that 'oh, but we're co-workers' bit, but I'm certainly not going to stop reading because of it.

Quite interesting. Props on making a very strong chapter. I enjoyed the conversation between Page and Darrow (and I didn't mind much to the "uncharacteristic" nature of the dialogue; I thought it was quite appropriately written). That little name-drop cliffhanger at the end? Genius. You do very well at creating such a tense atmosphere. Without a doubt I look forward to the next chapter.

I do have a question though: why do you add a hyphen before each line of dialogue?

A very good fic here so far I like it, update soon.

Very good plot update soon I hope?