Oh my, what to say after reading your story! Amazing and sweet come to mind!

Though short, I think you did a very good job of bringing out Alisa's emotions and you painted a picture of a lovely couple in my mind! Well done!

Overall this was well written and wonderfully detailed. I really have negative to say about it! Perhaps the only nit pick was the length. But that's such a minor thing when compared to the depth and feeling you were able to convey.

I'm looking forward to reading more from you!

Wow! It's hard for me to find words for what I read!

First of all, this is written beautifully! I love the look into Alisa's head! You did a wonderful job on her POV!

The way you had her describe things was perfect! I like how there was a mention of sweets at times. Though I really felt sorry for her when you mentioned what happened to her at age 5!

It's really hard to find anything negative here, and that is a good thing! As is, I only noticed two things, but they are minor really.

I think, near the beginning, instead of saying fishes, it should have just been fish. I think it would look better that way.

The second part is when she said 'she smelt it' referring to the chocolate cake. I can't explain why, but that didn't sit well with me. I think it would have fit better if she said a certain smell hit her nose. But that's my opinion!

Overall though, this story is very well done! I look forward to reading more from you!

This one is great. I also think Alisa is awesome