Cliff hanger! Awesome story :)

Sanubis!

NICE... BUT FOR THE COUPLE... SANUBIS! OH YEA!

nice job on this well that's an understatment more like AWESOME! i'm on team sanubis! please update soon!

1. Good chapter, though a little short.

2. I think "petrified" should have been in italics though.

3. His arms around her...hips? Perv!Carter. xD

4. Anyway, update soon! :)

Nice chapter! I bet Hawaii was fun! I loved it; I went there when I was five.

Anyway, there were random words that shouldn't have been capitalized.

Update soon!

Did you have to leave off at the climax? I'm mostly Zarter but I prefer Sanubis over Salt.

InheriM

Hey, this is a really good story so far! But just so you know, 'hi' in Arabic sounds nothing like 'hotep'. It's actually 'ma'salaama laykum'. and yes, I do actually speak Arabic, well a little. my dad's side of the family is actually Egyptian, so I'm leanring Arabic. Sorry about the strange capitalization, but my phone is odd.

Hey, this is coming along pretty good! :) Everyone seems very IC, and the plot is coming along nicely. update soon! stupid phone! :p

Hey, this is a really good story so far! But just so you know, 'hi' in Arabic sounds nothing like 'hotep'. It's actually 'ma'salaama laykum'. and yes, I do actually speak Arabic, well a little. my dad's side of the family is actually Egyptian, so I'm leanring Arabic. Sorry about the strange capitalization, but my phone is odd.

Oh please hurry update soon I need to find out what happens!

I really love sanubis, so i am a sanubis fan!

he he he! That was cool. I hope there is more Zarter soon though! Good job for a first timer!