Getting better. :) Keep up. ;)

X3

HI! good chap. I know I sound like a total jerk right now, but I don't mean to.

u see, the story is going a little too fast. by that i mean every chapter. you see, u need to describe the settings. for example: "The wind bristled past her hair as she walked down the hill, vanishing into the sunset".

I Know i sound like a jerk but i am trying to help.

Love it! Maybe you could write about a giant ol(Okay, I just watched about a giant ol :)) and Mickaela reading the ol's mind to see what it is about to do... yeah. Lalala. 3

Lion and dragon?
Lol
My friend is ranga.
I dot see what peoples problem with red heads is but anyway.
Good work((

Hey, awesome job(;
Lol. I really liked that...
I'll read the next chapter now

Good job in using that:D
I Loved wizards of waverly place:)

very good:)
short but good.
I'll let u know if i got any ideas:)

as always, write more please

love ya;)

This is such a fascinating story!

Your definetly getting better with your writing
Keep up the good work(;
And thanks(:
Love Daisyline

Very good my friend!;)
I think u write a little to rushed though... It's either that or i just need to eat... But I think u can use a little description.
The story is great without it though:)

I luv pikachu too;)
In fact I used to have a Pikachu poster... We Pikachu luvers are awesome:)

Hey
It's me redsparrow3, but I finally got my own account
Yay!
I thought that was cute:)
Maybe they can go into the dark and all the animals gang up on gorl?
Or maybe lief and barda can get knocked out and it's up to the girls to get the gem
I don't know
These are bad ideas but its 11 o'clock at night
I'll see if I have any dreams to help me

:3

I hopes someone will give u good idea. I have one but I wanna see what other people thought;)

I cant believe how much Mickaela is like jasmine! Are the animals that Mickaela has the same as Kree and filli? If so what is what it not what are they?

Well its good and can you write new chapter?