Haha this is actually really funny. I need moree! I love this story, my kind of humor. I read all five chapters just now, do me and everyone else a favor- update.

Ah well, I guess I need some constructive critism in here as well, no? I guess you just have to put in more details, a bit more specifics, maybe add more descriptive words? However I like how you do dialogue, especially when it came to the drunken guy. That was pretty funny.

Love, love, LOVE this story! Please continue!

Dod anyone else go when the chapter ended?

I really enjoyed this and can't wait till the next chapter. your stories are funny with a touch of fluff and i love it. Im a big fan. your one of my favorite writers :) continue the good work... and the fluff love the fluff

i think the cake making should go wrong, and all of them should get covered in cake mix!

Gah! Sorry for being a butt, I'm not a big fan of reviewing.

Anyways, I really like this story, and I look forward to more.

Also, I got the 'Pendleton' reference.

Chapter three was absolutely plot was clearly well thought-out I loved the whole thing. your wording and grammar is spectacular. Although i think you could explain things a little better I think I shall continue to read your rather soapy story :3 I think the plot bunny have truly blessed you with an amazing story I don't know how you don't have more reviews. I have read your other stories and you have improved a lot. sorry for not bothering to log in to leave a review.

they look through the telescope aaaaand AAAAAAH!