This is brilliant. I love how you kept Grantaire so in character and funny. Please write more. Maybe a sequel? Hopefully, but I've just noticed this was written 9 years ago. Well I can dream, this was such a great story.

I love the way you write! The style you used was perfect! I hope you plan on becoming a professional writer. For what it's worth, I'd buy a book if you were the author. Keep up the good work!

you forgot Jehan Prouvaire and Bahorel-oh wait, bahorel wan't /in/ the musical. *pout* poor bahorel. however, story was good anyway and the combeferre/glasses thing reminded me of myself. no wonder i am 'ferre to LP's enjolras...

Loved it.

Please write more? *begs you*

This was amusing. I enjoyed it. I love anything narrated by Grantaire. It is true

that Victor did an excellent job intro. the boys but I always enjoy a fresh spin.

As for the slash well... Hugo did say that the only two kisses that Enjolras had

ever given were the two he gave to Father Mabeuf after the old man died

while replanting the flag on the barricade. Hugo clearly meant for Enjolras

to be a virgin, celibate priest of the ideal etc. That hasn't stopped any number

of people from writing stories where he not that. Some of the stories are

quite good so I don't worry much about that diversion from the cannon.

Whatever horseplay may have gone on between the other boys or between

the boys and an assortment of girls or in poor Grantaire's sodden brain is

open for debate. I only have two bones to pick: 1. I missed Jehan. I would

have loved to read Grantaire's description of him! Chuckles and 2. More

please! I was eagerly waiting to hear what happened between E. and R.

Sounds like the start of an interesting story.

Mademoiselle, Sebastian Francois Grantaire is a name that hurts my head for my personal reasons. I shan't complain more than that, but it requires an accent aigu on the e of Sebastian and a cedille in Francois - I don't know if they work in reviews, but I know that one can put them in the story.

Other than that, Victor Hugo wrote this scene. Not verbatim, but he wrote it, albeit without the explicit slash. Implicit, perhaps, but I am not M'sieur and I do not presume to know.

With Grantaire's cheery tone, and the way you've punctuated your sentences, this reads like Dick Van Dyke's character from the movie version of 'Mary Poppins.' This may have been what you intended; it may not. I mentioned it to one of my friends, and she said, "Chim-chiminy chim-chim cheroo- muskets go off, when I shake hands with you..." All in all, I don't expect that was the effect you were seeking.f

I love the Joly description. You didn't spare to much on the ears though, even if ya didn't elaborate. I just loved this.

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