| Reviews for Doki Doki Temptation! |
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CloudEnvyKunoichi 12/31/11 . chapter 1Great chapter! I can't wait for the next one oh and while I was reading I noticed this sentence: "I didn't want to -actually I did- want to betray their wishes on becoming a doctor," When you put in the '-actually I did-' you put want to twice, once before and after, I suggest the sentence be like this: "I didn't want to -actually I did- betray their wishes on becoming a doctor," Sorry it's my grammar side kicking in, my friend engraves every correction she has to make on my stories into my head ' hope you don't mind, well until the next chapter XD |