That was so happy! I almost jumped off the wall! THAT WAS A REALLY AWSOME STORY!

Hello. :)

Well. This little one-shot has lots of potential. :D I can see that. Let me just critique on something: your tenses changed. At the first part you were narrating in the past tense and when it came to the middle to the end it became present.

Might I suggest in flashbacks you use past tense. Not present. Since it happened in the past and stuff. :)

You had many minor mistakes here and there. Something a beta could fix. :D I advise you get a beta. Lots of good ones out there. ;) (I can, if you want. Just one-shots can do at this time. _)

There were times that Cora was a bit... OOC. She acted like a teenager in your fic. ;P With the "shut-ups" and the "whatevers". Shouldn't she be a bit more mature than that? :)

Broderick was... interesting here. You went inside of him. Good job. :) But the swearig parts... meh. That was the only problem for him.

Jonah. Jonah wasn't really that important in the story and didn't have too much speaking parts - so I'm guessing he's alright. :D

Anyway, sorry for any typos/mistakes in this review... I'm in my iPod. D:

Good job! Keep up the good work! :)

kAye (:

Great story, but wasn't Cora one of the Cahills who freaked out when the house caught on fire?