Interesting.

Love it so far. I would like to see an update.

plz write more

Ok this chapter is much better...but I see that you are creating plot holes.

What I mean is how did the summon know about the kyuubi in the 2nd chapter?

What did the third hokage say about this Uzumaki and his want to make Naruto into a spider summoner?

Why would the hokage let this person into the village let alone to train Naruto when no one knows him?

Why did Jiraiya agree so easily to naruto summoning spiders rather than toads?

When you write a chapter, it is always a good idea to read over the chapter a few times and ask yourself questions like that...it helps flesh the chapter out more, and makes it easier and more entertaining to read.

You have a very promising story and I feel you could be a greeat writer if you keep these things in mind.

I will keep an eye on your story and if you need help holler back at me.

fester

I am interested in the story idea...I don't think it has been done before so it is a sweet idea. kudos for that.

What I see thus far is lack of details. The first chapter was far too short to hold attention. My suggestions is to make the chapters 3 to 3500 words long. My chapters are usually around 5000, so the decision is yours.

A fight scene should have some play to it. In other words be a little descriptive in the battle. A lot of readers cry for details, good fight scenes, and strangely enough romance. Since Naruto is a "tragic character" a lot of writers usually put him with a love interest.

I will read the next chapter and give you more.

fester

an interesting idea...but I hope the other chapters are longer.

fester

I hpe after this you plan yo slow your story down. in my opinion you are advancing to fast and are not developing your characters or background enough. some examples are how you entirely skipped his training. Or how you havn't really developed naruto's and miki's relationship except for a few interactions and its already to the point it is. Please take this into consideration as it will help your story become much better.

Extend the chapter length and it would be better.

the battles were pretty good. can't wait to see more of naruto's battle. you gotta get a proof reader though. i'll even do it if you want. still like the story though. thanks for sharing

Great chapter, I can't wait for the next one, so I wish u the best of luck with next chapter, the rest of this story, and all ur other stories, until next time, JA NE!

I'm glad that the Invasion is here, and I'm wondering if Masao is going to die in this invasion, as that is what it seems to me is going to happen. _

Yeah so Happy to see a update. I cant wait for more of this awesome story

well this is certainly new in a good way :). anyway chapters are a bit short but still enjoyable (like i'm one to talk) and for (4) it give me a slight Rosario vampire dejavu but that might just be me

4. didn't Ino say that line to Sakura when they were comparing chest sizes of the female nin at one time or something like that

Make more chapters, this is a good story. I always wondered if Naruto had gained other summons if things would be different. Go check my stories to see if I am wrong.

Anyway, Peace Out.