This was really good. Great work!

This is great! I hope you write more Across the Universe fan fic. )

I loved this! I think you captured Amy and Elder perfectly. I felt like it would be an actual piece in the book! Great job! :)

Your first fanfic? Congratulations.

I like how you used Amy's things - camera, nail polish, sunset photo - to give some extra grounding to her character. Also Harley and Elder's cute reactions to the "antiquated" technology. However I'm not sure nail polish would be allowed on a ship because of all those smelly chemicals circulating through the recycled air.

Still, well done. I hope to see more of your stories in this fandom, as it's sadly underrepresented on this site.