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Shannon
2003-06-26 . chapter 7
I loved your story, you should keep on writing.
theroguepheonix
2002-09-08 . chapter 6
great story please continue
TaRia
2002-06-15 . chapter 1
That was wonderful. I would love to see that as a show for Wolf Lake. I so so dying to see what will happen after Sophia threw Luke on the car. Your story gave me something to think about, even if the show is cancelled (I truly hope not). Please continue it.
lilygirl2001
2002-06-13 . chapter 7
awesome fic!! had a kinda weak ending, though.
Elektra
2002-06-11 . chapter 7
Come on! That can not be the end! I'm thinking sequel or a continuance.
sylvie
2002-06-11 . chapter 7
IT'S A GREAT FIC. I IKED IT. SO DID MY FRIENDS. WRITTE MORE WOLF LAKE PLEASE.
Ms. S. E. Hammond
2002-05-28 . chapter 6
Patients is a virtue. Slow down and take the time to write something that actually flows......and we, the readers, don't have to stop and spend 5 minutes trying to figure what you are actually to trying to convey. Write it first in Microsoft Word and run it through Spell/Grammar check. Save it. Then, cut-n-paste it into here.

OTHERWISE, your story-telling abilities are truly incredible. BTW: I think it's really cool, that you are willing to stick to your principles and not write graphic-filled ** scenes. But, since you're not. Please, rate these fan-fics at PG-13, so that us you perfer using the "child protected" PC......don't have to shut it down...and move over to the adult-friendly PC. Thank you.
fearless angel
2002-05-25 . chapter 6
continue writing this amazing story

email when you have up dated please

jas-0886@hotmail.com
fearless angel
2002-05-25 . chapter 1
continue writing this amazing story

can you email me when you have updated it

jas_0886@hotmail.com
NIC
2002-05-21 . chapter 6
I YHINK YOUR FICTION IS GOOD KEEP ON WRITING

2002-05-17 . chapter 6
MORE MORE!!!! Great Job!!
anon
2002-05-17 . chapter 1
my bad-
i must give you MY APPOLOGIZE. looks like the site was the culprit, not you.
feel free to delete both my second and this review.
honestly, i feel bad now.
Isabella
2002-05-17 . chapter 6
Some things are better left to the imagination of the reader. Your fiction is great, keep writing!
Jael
2002-05-17 . chapter 6
I like your ideas and this story has alot of potential. However, the chapters are too short and the POV switches too jarring. Try sticking with one POV for a chapter at a time.

Your dialogue all runs together in one big paragraph which makes it difficult to read. Each person's new sentence should be on a seperate line with a space in between lines.

Finally - this definately feels rushed. What makes a story a great read and not just an OK one are the details. You are hitting us with major information in each short chapter with nothing to flesh it out in between: How did John feel when he saw Ruby was a wolf? Didn't he have any questions for her? What would he have asked her? Would he have been angry that she didn't trust him enough to tell him before now? How would Ruby be acting as she told him? Would she be crying? Readers want to know this stuff.

Good luck with your writing.
anon
2002-05-17 . chapter 6
hmmm
flames okay too?
i'll give you the benefit of the doubt- sometimes fanfiction.net screws up my computer.
listen, you're 15, you're trying, i kept that in mind. no one expects you to be s.e. hinton. you wanted feedback, so i offered some. i offered complements and my honest opinion on how to improve.
if you don't want it, why ask for it?
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