Your story said alot with few words. It had real and understandable emotion. I loved it, and hope you write more soon.

This is so sad, you have a lot of potential, and is story is short and heartbreaking, write more:)

Very moving story. I like it a lot.

I have to admit that that was very interesting. The story was intriguing, and though you didn't say much, your language and choice of words had a good use of imagery and description. I think that if you were to try writing a longer story, you would do really well. (:

Good luck and happy writing!

Twin

Nice you did it from Nellie's perspective