Hi ,

I can't review to chapter 2 anymore so... Than chapter 1... I still hope you'll go on with this story... And I hope you don't mind if I give you some ideas... Maybe you could do something with Carolus ,Theus ,Jenne ,Maria being scared of the 'new' world for them ,or they find it hard to cope with the changes or... I have many ideas so I'll try to just give you a description...

Maria is the youngest so she isn't realy 'aware' of what happened and the change from crusade to present goes really smooth because of that for her. She only trusts Dolf in the beginning (and maybe Jenne) ,but after a while she becomes closer and closer with his mother. And they become like family (what they now are ,I think... Because of the change of times...)

Carolus wants to be brave and can handle everything al right ,but everytime someone else then Dolf or his friends come close he gets scarred. He stays the braver one and tries to change and when he accepts the other people around him he kinda likes it.

Theus is more impressed of everything. He just takes it how it is and doesn't have a problem with that. He likes it from the moment he wakes up in Dolfs room. He tries some old stuff from Dolf like... Cars to play with ,balls to play football with. He is more an adventurer and just tries some things. Some things he does he likes and others he doesn't. He explores this new world through experiences.

And now... Jenne. She stays realy close to Dolf. She only trusts him and is scared for more things than the others. Her relationship with Dolf is realy ,realy growing ,but her greatest problem is that she is scared of the new world and that she needs to trust others.

Later on you can maybe try to let them go to school... But that's later.

I hope I helped you a bit and I hope you will post again. I'll try to make a part of what I exactly try to explain you. Like a part of a new chapter (realy hope you don't mind about that)

Xxx Anne

Please go on ! You're the only one with a story about crusade in jeans longer than one chapter...

Long story short, my mother changed my password so I can't log in. ARG!

But I LOVE this! I was totally heart-broken when Theus died, and Carolus rocks majorly (FAVORITE CHARACTER) and . . . and . . . well, your story is spectacular! Far above the standard quality of fanfiction, which I regret to say is rather low. I mean the standard quality of fanfiction is rather low, not the quality of your story. Your story is awesome.

3 3 3,

Ami

Love it!Please keep are so few of these on FF. 3