Nice! You nailed both of their voices—I love the dinner small talk. The juxtaposition of gore and marinara was also pretty wonderful.

That was brilliantly written! And incredibly in character - chillingly so, I loved it!

:D so good! I really liked it, it felt like both of the characters.

Very good story! The dialog was very much like herbert and daniel. you write quite well.

I really enjoyed this one. I could Invisualize it easily and it seemed as if it could have been a real movie scene.

( I don't know if Brien yuzna or stuart gordon would go through with it,but they should have)