You've definitely improved in your writing. This was a standout chapter, I really enjoyed it. And the ending action scene was done wonderfully. I can picture everything clearly and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Nice cliffhanger setup by the way.

Darn it... why the cliffhanger? Update soon so I don't wallow in such devastating suspense. Another great chapter! In my last review when I said you had "restraint," I meant that you don't exaggerate or try to manipulate anything in some horrible way so that it fits what you want, but rather you keep all the people in character despite this being AU. So yeah, it was a compliment when I said you had great "restraint." Keep up the great work!

My guess is either Izumi or a hostile...or maybe Winry. XD Love this chapter-I'm getting the feeling that Winry is expecting! So exciting :) Keep writing!

Just read your story in 2-3 days and it's pretty amazing! It's a very well done AU and I can't wait to see how everything develops. You style of writing is witty and has a certain restraint that only adds to the suspense. Can't wait for the next chapter!

niceee... i like that chapter :D I really cant wait for the next one please update pretty *dog eyes pleading* oh and also I like the new summary :3

Awesome chapter! And I like the new summary, much more dynamic :) and I think I know what's got Winry all flustered ;D

uuuuuu, it starts to get dark, but I find it quite interesting. Please update as quickly as possible. Do not be pressured, but your story is just fascinating, I'd like to read it soon.

I can't wait for the next chapter! Is it still going to be Envy (he probably goes by a different name) that killed Maes in this AU? hmm... Well, even if it isn't you seem to make everything fit together so well I doubt it will matter! :)

I don't think your plot is confusing. It's complex, yes, but that's what makes it good. As for the new summary, I like it (though I can't really remember what the old one was like...)
Again, great chapter! I like how the plot is moving, and that you made some link between Greed and Ling. Great work!

Oh dear. Plot, plot, plot and more plot.
I LOVE IT! Brilliant, man, just brilliant. I love this AU you've created and how you got everyone involved in this. Everything about their past became much clearer, although the Roy and Riza past remains a mystery. I'm looking forward to how you'll transfer the rest of the FMA events to your AU.

Lovely. ouo Great job at pulling together so many characters and events all into one chapter! And you did well at transferring those events to fit the AU. I'd say this chapter would do pretty well on its own as a one-shot.

(Took a while to finish this chapter in between the chaos of Hurricane Sandy. My house lost power on Monday and it still isn't back... ;v;)

Hi, I am loving this story so far. I love the police force idea, not too different from the military, but just a small thing that is bugging me. In the police force, the English one at least, there is no anti-frat laws. I know plenty of officers who are married. :) Just that one thing, otherwise it's fantastic.

Also, if I could draw, I would draw a cover image for you, have you considered going onto DeviantArt and commissioning one of the talented Royai artists there?

I swear, I swell up with tears every time I see something related to Hughes' death. He's one of my Favourite characters...

Anyways, just did a massive read through of your story, and I am simply astonished at how fantastic it is. It serves as a wonderful parallel to the original series (Both 2003 and Brotherhood) while giving it a more modern feel to it. Kudos to you, and keep up the amazing work! I look forward to the next chapter :)

Great chapter! I'll be looking forward to the next update.

I'm crying right now for Hughes...

Great chapter so far! Can't wait for the next one! :D And you're looking for someone to draw your cover. I can do it. Just tell me what kind of drawing do you want. :)

Best regards, Maru.