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| Blitz-Dragonsteel 2005-08-20 ch 1,  | abuseCool, i like the boldyness. |
| Poiniard 2003-07-26 ch 1, | abuseI find it a little hard to believe that Khelben would turn to the drow to get the wizards for his team. The drow elves are supposed to be an evil race. You might want to explain his rationale a little better. |
| zap777 2002-08-12 ch 2, | abuseThis is a really good fic so far. I can't wait to read it. This is defenitely going on my favorites list. |
| KA 2002-05-20 ch 1, | abuseLoL, thanks for reading, GreatGoose. Yeah *sheepish*, you'll have to ignore all the inconsistencies and oddities in dialogue and D&D reference. I wrote this novel 8 years ago, when I just discovered AD&D...but don't despair, I"m in the process of totally revamping it so that ti isn't so insane. Cheers! |
| GreatGoose 2002-05-19 ch 2, anon. | abuseNice job on Chapter 1. Some of the launguage is rather modern though. ie "This forest blows". How are those two from Myth Drannor? It was destryoed aeons ago. Are they human or elf? Sindel is rather bitter for a priestess of Lady Luck. Who does Will serve? One last suggestion, I think you should replace the "oh my god" things with "oh my (insert diety of speaking character here)" Nice job so far. Cheers The Great Goose |
| GreatGoose 2002-05-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseI just have read the prolouge so far, but over all, nice job. How'd you get the drow to coopereate? Also, would Khelben order the destruction of something because it was Evil? what about the Balance? Nice job so far, I see good things for these charactors |