Have to say that I love the work and certainly enjoy the way that you portray Mario and Akane. Keep it up and I hope that you can get some more parts up soon. If you need any help (prereader/proofreader/whatever) just give me a ring and I'd love to help yeh out.

Spelling. You *REALLY* need to correct it.

Good chapter but you really need someone who is fluent in english and has spellchecker to edit your works so they are right.

Not a bad start, but you seemed to channel Yoda and Dr.Suess in your writing.

Thanks! I Almost Forget that... It is yet in the second Chap.

More will follow..

At least acknowledge Nintendo, in the disclaimer, for the use of Princess Peach. It's only fair, since you do Rumiko Takahashi already.

Anyway, enough about the disclaimer. I really can't say much, until I read more. I am writing this when chapter 2 is not quite finished, btw.

make it a peach+ranma pairing. a lot of shampoo, ukyo and akane pairings out there. want to orginal pairings

I think you should stick with Peach since there already many Ranma/Akane, Ukyo, and Shampoo pair. A new kind of character could use in the story.

More of this fic please