|Reviews for Black Sanctuary|
| usagi-strike 6/4/13 . chapter 9
Huh. Could be better if you'd updated more recently, but hey, what the hell! Good story!
| MysticalNyla 9/6/12 . chapter 7
| jasderoanddavid5012 2/19/12 . chapter 4
I know how you feel, trying to come up with new innocence, their abilities, and everything else. Advice? I'd stay don't try to stick to any one character for inspiration too closely. Mix and mash things, so it's different but not too out there. For Night and Miria I'd say do some sort of cross between Cloud Nine's monkey and a few of it's abilities, maybe some of Kanda's illusion abilities, and then possibly something with one of the Noah, um, Lulu Bell most likely.
I hope it helps. I don't want to say too much or I might end up running half your story line. Lol. The story line is very good as it is. And I like how you varied your sentence structure at the beginning. Very Nice. Keep at it!
| MCRDanime 1/21/12 . chapter 2
I like it. Please continue. And is she going to end up with someone? Oh is this the beginning of the anime or manga? If not will you please tell me which part did you begin this story? Thanks! Update soon!
| jasderoanddavid5012 1/16/12 . chapter 1
This is a good story, and it was interesting to read. Just a hint though. If you want to get the audience's attention then you need to work on your opening sentence.
Also keep in mind that you can put in flashbacks and hints about something that happened in the past and then explain it later, even if at the moment you don't know where that flash back will lead you. Remember that those tiny changes can take the story to places you never imagined and make it much better!
But the story is good. It doesn't hint much at what is going to happen until the very end! That's good, keep that up. I like that you keep very close to the idea of the main character being like a doll with little emotions, then break through that with finding the dog. That's good. This will become a very interesting story!