|Reviews for Bluestar's grief|
| ur mom 8/22/12 . chapter 2
wow, lot good her father is at a time like this...stupid basterd
| Mel. with blue and black wings 3/14/12 . chapter 4
Awesome job! :D
| Blackish 1/17/12 . chapter 1
Capitalize your title properly.
[their pelts spiked with water and anger]
It should be "spiky". "Spiked" is what people say when someone sneaks alcohol into a drink.
[ at least thats what Goosefeather said,]
"Thats" should be "that's" (the short form of "that is").
[She didn't smell the same, the Mint and Lilac didn't cover]
Replace the comma with a semicolon, and don't capitalize mint and lilac.
[ looking up at the star's]
"Stars". If you say "star's", that actually means "star is".
[ who's head was resting]
I like how Bluepaw thinks of her mother's death in terms of the herbs. It really highlights how pointless Moonflower's death was. However, this chapter is really, really short. I think my review has almost the same number of words. Write /more/; devote more than two or three sentences to describing how the characters feel.