Update, I tell you! UPDATE! PLEASE? I really, really like the idea, and I hope to see more :D

...well then...

Lol, I like this story much more maybe as a plot instead of a one-shot, like maybe three or four chapters (but that's up to you) umm.. I don't really have anything to say that I didn't like. Plot- Great! Concept-Brilliant. One thing I kinda didnt like was your writing style. Me personally, I'm not that fond of block style because it kinda confuses me _

But overall really good startoff!