I am happy with this chapter! :D It's a really good story and I'd love to read more. Though I hope you'll elaborate a little more on how Kariko died and Akkarin and Sonea's relationship!

ahhhhhhhh! so cute!

i love akkarin! (with sonea obviously)

want to see what happens at the dance, update, update, update! (please?)

good chapter, can't wait for the next one!

This is shaping up to be a good story...can't wait to read more! :)

There's not much to say about this chapter, since not much happened there, but I would have a question : when you speak about a rogue, do you mean Sonea ? Because in fact, she's not a rogue, just a natural. Another thing, but it is only a small detail : I don't think anyone in Kyralia would say "for God's sake" since obviously there's no Christ there. But again, it's just something I noted, nothing of importance.

btw, I find your casting idea very interesting ! See my comment on youtube for details ;-)

I liked it ! Hope you'll update soon.

I just want to point out something which disturbed me a bit : you constantly change the point of view, without any indication. I think you should try writing either from a character's pov, or even several characters' -but then please help us understand who is speaking at the moment -, or from an external pov, like a narrator. Mixing both way seems strange to me, and as I said, a little disturbing.

Apart from this point, I'm quite impatient to know what's going to happen next, so please don't be upset with my criticism and keep writing )

nice start, cant wait for the next chapter