|Reviews for A Consulting Detective's Babysitter|
| TheGirlWhoImagined 4/8/13 . chapter 37
You could always buy the next season on Amazon or I-tunes, that's what I did when it first came out (the day after it aired in the UK). :)
| zodiacgurl17 3/17/13 . chapter 5
the constant 'thea karr-michael' is starting to get annoying since its in the chapter so many times. perhaps make it more obvious that its a separator or change it to a line or something because it distracts. other than that still good.
| zodiacgurl17 3/17/13 . chapter 4
I liked that you used the unaired pilot version of the episode for your story. i liked it a little bit more than the original. so far its good.
| kimboik 1/26/13 . chapter 1
Hope you write a sequel.
| Gwilwillith 12/17/12 . chapter 36
Interesting ending. Great chapter!
| bored411 12/17/12 . chapter 36
w man. this makes me sad. are you going to make a sequel? i seriously cannot wait to see thea make a comeback and to surprise sherlock with her daughter ;)
| bored411 12/16/12 . chapter 35
whoo! last chapter coming up but i'm sad it's ending. please update soon though. i can't wait to see how you end this ;)
| Gwilwillith 12/16/12 . chapter 35
| bored411 12/15/12 . chapter 34
this is great! no matter what that stupid moron said. don't listen. they're full of crap. :( i really like this story and this chapter was pretty good too so please update again soon! and try not to pay mind to jerk-offs like that. most of the time they're just judging people because they can't write as good as others anyway. i would know. i've had my fair share of idiotic reviewers ;)
| Gwilwillith 12/15/12 . chapter 34
| Caramelogy 12/15/12 . chapter 34
Just so you know, I meant
| Caramelogy 12/15/12 . chapter 1
Hi! This is my first review in a very long time. I just wanna say that I have been reading this story since it started and honestly, I really enjoyed it and I looked forward to every update, especially when it went it hiatus(?) for a while. I'm not usually enthused about having an OC with Sherlock, but I followed this story and have been enjoying so far. And I'm pretty sure that people have been saying about putting paragraphs between spaces, but just so you know, I'm cool with it. Also, about Thea being a Mary Sue... I guess that's probably how you visualised her, so I'm cool with it. I'm not going to go about the paragraphing and such, I just want to let you know that this story is pretty good.
P.S. Sorry for my terrible English. I suck at grammar.
| ianxfalcon 12/15/12 . chapter 18
If someone were to ask me what a Mary Sue was, I would direct them to this fic. Your Thea is the biggest Mary Sue I have ever had the misfortune to read about. Let's see: Dark and troubled past (which is exaggerated to the point of parody, and revealed in the least dramatic and most inappropriate way one could ever imagine)? OH, yes. Takes ALL of the canon characters' good traits, i.e. Sherlock's intelligence, John's kindness, etc. with none of their flaws? Yup. Keeps on stealing all the good lines, because you can't be arsed to come up with new ones? Hells yeah. She's a textbook example of a Sue. She is also extremely unlikeable, smug, and condescending. She brings absolutely nothing to the story; if you were to remove her, this would be a very boring recap of the show. Not that it's not boring anyway, because it is, it's one of the dullest stories I have ever read. It's basically just a transcript of the actual show, but without any of the emotional impact. Look, if I wanted a recap of the show, I would just WATCH THE SHOW. I also don't appreciate the way she keeps turning to us, the readers, and explain everything, like: Sherlock was doing his deduction of John. NO, REALLY? We already figured that out, and in fact we would have even if we hadn't seen the freaking episode. We are not idiots, you know.
Then there is the issue with using the pilot instead of the actual episode. The pilot is not canon, and it doesn't fit with the rest of the story. Where is Mycroft in the end? How come John, not knowing that Mycroft is Sherlock's brother, doesn't react the next time he shows up? Of course, no one in your fic ever reacts to anything; they just talk, there is no drama, no tension. I could use your version of the swimming pool scene as an example on how NOT to write a dramatic scene. You've removed everything that makes Moriarty terrifying; all you do is write down what he says. For all those who haven't seen the episode, he could just be talking like a robot. No emotion, again. It's annoying, and along with your Sue's arrogance and uselessness, this story is really grating on my nerves.
You should also learn some basic skills when it comes to dialogue. Most importantly: when a new person is talking, CHANGE PARAGRAPHS. The way it's written now, it's damn near impossible to tell who is talking, especially since you keep giving other characters' lines to Thea, which means she always sounds like another character, Sherlock or John or even Lestrade at times; she has no voice on her own. She also has no personality and no point, but I think I've made that clear already. And you know, she has not given anyone any reason to trust her. She keeps honing in on the friendship between John and Sherlock - which is especially annoying given how unique and genuine it is in-story, but with her around, it never gets the chance to grow. You're going to throw in an OC in a story and do a canon rewrite, you have to CHANGE SOMETHING. IF, and it's a big IF, Sherlock actually would make friends (and whatever else you're going to take their relationship to) with a woman, a police with a serial killer daddy and a bitchy attitude, it would inevitably change the story. It would also be very out of character for him, but sadly, that's the least of your problems. There is a reason why Sues are universally despised, you know.
So I'm sorry, but this story doesn't work. I hope I'm not hurting your feelings, but it has to be said.
| Gwilwillith 12/14/12 . chapter 33
| bored411 12/14/12 . chapter 33
aw man. poor thea. it's gotta suck being exposed like that. T.T once again though, amazing chapter. i love how she totally just blabbered some facts about herself. and i can't wait to read what happens next ;)