It took you awhile to hit your stride (around the middle of the third chapter), but this is pretty well done. Your writing style could use a little more descriptive terms and it'd be helpful to describe the surroundings in each scene a little more, but you're doing an excellent job and you improve with each chapter. Well done. I look forward to the next chapter.

Good story

i really love how this story is realistic, hes not being saved by miricales all the time

For the glory of the emperor, I demand MOAR

The plot thickens. Btw, this is such a cool story. I would buy this if it were published

Good story so far, however grey knights are suppose to be a secret chapter protecting humanity from daemons and are unknown to all except to a select few as the few who serve along side them are either executed or mind wiped but whatever, keep up the good work

Awesome Ciaphas Cain style chapter. Both the grim humor and the car chase reminded me of it. Pretty sure there's a similar car chase thing in Cain. Agnus is as awesomely sarcastic and selfish as usual. Sephilia's as awesomely cute as usual.

Now that's a fair amount of grimdark. Learnt a lot about WH40K lore from this chapter. Not sure there are any instances of Culexus assassins fighting daemons, so we probably wouldn't know what the Animus Speculum does to a daemon prince.

Woah, a breathtaking story so far, and not a single spelling mistaked was seen by me! Keep it up, please :)

That was absolutely phenomenal! It was brutal, pulse-pounding, epic, quite amusing at points and all through it, showcased the insane fanaticism of the Imperium. I mean, yeesh, so many suicide bombers there; truly 'tis so when they say that the blood of martyrs is the seed of the Imperium. Or something like that.

Bloody good work.

Bravo! you never fail to surprise me, this is indeed a excellent read! i love the writing style you used in this, its so different from your FE fics, it really does have the wry tone of the Cain novels and the action packed brutal combat of the Gaunt novels, nice job! cheers for another story on my waiting list!

I do like the Ciaphas Cain of the Inquisition. Continue, please.

Good going bro. See you next Monday.

good chapter really enjoyed it hope they succeed in their plan to destroy the battle barge

Again, great chapter. Keeps the tradition of sarcasm going.