Mr. Spier, not Mr Spier. Also, don't keep on using said. It would also be At least she knew how I felt about losing a best friend to an illness, not of an illness.

So, this is third person's POV right? I like third person the best because it involves many character's perspectives. Awesome job!

That's really cool, that her shirt became famous. Oh, by the way, what's a belly shirt? Is it an American garment, or the like?

Four A.M., not four am. Otherwise, great! Like the story idea!

Your story is actually not that bad, and I really admire your integrity for keeping on posting chapters, even though you only have one review! Great job!

Even though your stories are in dire need of a grammar check, you don't give up. You don't let the bad reviews bother you. You continue to post your stories, no matter what. Your stories have great concepts; you do not need to have Mary Anne sick or a friend dying or her having nightmares in each chapter or story. When people (nicely) give you advice, they're not being mean. They just want to help you improve.