It's amazing, well done, and i liked the leo and renee phone call very much, ;)))

great story

Another great chapter!

So this isn't really a review...

I started reading fan fiction back in December and yours was one of the first I've read. I'm slightly obsessed with 24 and Renee Walker. (Who am I kidding, it's way more than slightly!) I pretty much fell in love with this story and had no idea you were still working on it, so many I've read just stop mid-story. Anyway, I am going to go back and read it over before I read this. Then I'll give you a real review! :D Can't wait to reread this!

Well, I think that's about halfway done for sure and the story is getting quite intense.

Leo's situation is certainly not getting any better, with him getting shot and such. And Brendan's anger over the lost of one of his own men and blaming someone name Joe for it for sending to Igor to kill Renee, which failed. I wouldn't want to be on his bad side.

I can see Renee is still mad at Jack for not contacting the authorities on Leo. Her scene threatening Teller was something that Renee would do.

Now, it seems that Jack has been poisoned there.

Your grammar will need work on this chapter, but other than that, it's looking really good.

I just love this story. I hope Jack will be okay!

So far, it's really getting intense.

Jack and Renee are sure tense for the moment Jack did not warned the FBI about Leo and such. Hopefully, things will turn out alright later on.

Brendan, who is based on my name (Like I said many times before), sure is angry over the lost of one of his men. I wouldn't be on his bad side.

Renee is sure is infuriated with Teller and threatened to destroy the life as he knows it if Leo gets killed on his orders,

From the looks of what is happening to Jack at the end, I say he was definitely poisoned.

Anyway, I hope to see more soon.

Well, so far, so good. This part 4 of this story looks good, although I never actually read parts 1 and 3.

From what I read, it looks pretty good. With Renee alive and working as the White House Chief of Staff and Jack as a National Security Advisor, it nice to see them alive and as a couple as well. When Renee was killed off, I was really heartbroken and livid by it. Although I did watch the rest of the season, I don't think I will watch a 24 movie because of it.

Anyway, I just hope that things will turn out alright for Leo, but to be honest, his situation doesn't look good since he is wanted and he murdered that fat maniac Igor Laitanan and such. He and Jack will also have to deal with Mandy, this guy Brendan Marson and his men, as well as the Russian mob. I can also hope for the best for Jack and Renee, as well as some other characters in this story.

Anyway, I might be able to rest the other stories that your previously wrote involving this series. Plus, I hope to read the rest of this soon.

Hi Lara, this is a good story, very 24-like.
A little bit more of Jack and Renee would be perfect, but maybe... will come later.
Thanks for the story and all the work you have with it and sorry, my english is not so good.
But by reading your stories its going to be better.
greetings from germany
tommy

This looks like an interesting story of 24.

Leo seems like Jack for sure since he murdered Igor for killing his girlfriend by burning him alive.

Jack and Renee should be okay later on for sure. Their current job occupations is quite nice and unexpected for them.

So far, it seems like a good story. I haven't read your first three parts of your series. I might check them out when I find the time.

Good luck on the rest of that series.

Nice chapter you wrote.

Leo is on a revenge mode since he just burnt Igor alive for killing Liz, not to mention him fighting and eventually killing Liev.

That reporter sure deserves what was coming from Jack for discovering Renee's relationship with Vlad. Hopefully Jack and Renee will talk soon.

The meeting between Liz's parents and Renee was a really sad moment. I can't really blame Liz's father for rooting for Leo to kill Igor for killing his daughter and that he and his wife have to raise their grandson Cooper now.

I got a feeling that Todd is an abusive man judging by he reacted when Zoe will continue to work in the White House for the rest of the night.

I do hope I will see more soon.

OMGGG ! i loved it, sill loving leo as alwyas, and so sweet with jack and renee hope they will talk in the next chapter :D

Hmmm...Very goood chapter.

Leo killed Liev with a broken car window and him torturing Igor and now burning him alive was something.

THe scene with Renee, Cooper and Cooper's grandparents was a sad scene. I would be rooting for Leo to kill Igor like Liz's father said since Igor killed his daughter.

Jack confronting the reporter Layton was nice.

Anyway, I hope to read more soon.

Well, This looks interesting.

Renee sure isn't too happy with Jack lying to her and going after Leo on his own, that would have caused a scandal in President Taylor's administration. I know things will turn out okay for them, just don't take too long.

Renee will have contend with that reporter who is threatened to expose her past.

I sense Teller will cause problems for Jack, Renee and Leo during his time as acting FBI director.

Also, Mandy posing as a Secret Service agent with help from a mole from the Secret Service. Something big will happen later on that involves bombs that are being built by this guy Brendan and his group.

Leo was really nice to that poor girl who has been abused by Liev. Hopefully that girl will live a nice life after that. Now Leo would have to kill Liev and will lead him to find Igor.

Igor now knows that no one will help him now since Brendan betrayed him to the Russian mob and that Leo will track him down and kill him.

Anyway, I hope to see more of that story soon.

Once, again i loved it, i feel bad about Renee and jack though, xx And Igor seems to have more lies than a cat ?!:D