Good plot . But the characters need help sounding like the original ones. Here you have them cussing and not acting like the characters they are suppose to be portraying. All in all good idea but need to understand characters and more details.

This story I like it but just like the other guy said just proofread it or get a beta person to read it and just clarify the stuff

Good job, i just recommend reading out loud to your self because some sentences are a bit jumbled. Just read it out loud and listen to what it sounds like. Good work Though.