I admire the way you try and write Ararararagi, but you should have him describe more things. He once spanned several pages just looking at panties for a second. That tiny speck of description of him getting ready to into Senjougahara's house, you could expand on that for pages. Describe the building as if it is trying to become a character. If you want to write fanfiction Nisioisin's work. You should learn to make vivid images in your work.

haha poor boyfriend XD

The ending wasn't that bad.

In honest truth, I laughed aloud in the middle of my English class when I read the last few lines. O