Too lazy for quotation marks? Or simply never learned in school?

Cute story. Managed to get thru it despite lack of quotations. It would def rank in the great story category if you edited it and fixed the lack of quotes

I wanted very much to like this story, but I barely made it through chapter 2. It is properly impossible to read a story with so much dialogue but no quotations. I'm not sure what the artistic purpose for that is but it ruined the fic for me.

you need to have quotation marks or it is too hard to read but if it did it would be a good story.

I like it. Sequel?

I loved this story, first off. It was fast paced, had nice romance and a good amount of angst to top it all off. The only major problem I had was there were NO quotations! I highly suggest that you review this story and mend and problems such as spelling, grammar, etc. Also, you should probably consider expanding the relationship between Harry and Sirius. They didn't seem as close as they did in the books. Also, Voldemort. He is a central character after all. Perhaps you could add a dream or 'vision' sequence for when the sh*t hits the fan after the Witch Weekly incident. But overall great gripping story and I agree that was a good place to end but it was a tad bit rushed. Not saying you have to do any of this, just some things to think over :)

Nice story - but I stopped after just a few chapters - because the lack of quotation marks was too frustrating... would love to read it once it's better formated... best wishes

This is an AWESOME story! Please tell me you're not abandoning it? :(

While the story ended on a good note, it was left very open ended, with a lot of questions left unresolved. Not terribly satisfied with it, but not horribly disappointed either.

Lot of errors in this chapter. Left letters off words, some wrong tenses, etc.

Example: While different, they were distinctly different in some ways.

This seems to be a pretty good story so far. A good Severitus.

HOWEVER, there are these things called quotation marks. They are used to indicate when someone is speaking. This story would be eons less confusing if you used them. And since the majority of your grammar is perfect, I'm really confused as to why you didn't in the first place.

ugh! This is impossible to read, although your story looks good, you have no showing of when someone is speaking rather then just discribing.

All the speech marks are missing! brilliant story otherwise - finally one where Lily doesn't cheat on James!

hard to read when there is no sign when things being said start. good story nonetheless XD

hugs!

though it was pretty fast it was good and you ended on the right note. good job

and i loved it how you made a group of friends who helped him