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GeorgeTobor
2009-11-08 . chapter 7
This is good, I'd like if it became a Namna and Rabiki fic. Nabiki has done more for Ranma in this fic than any other girl. Thanks for writing.
yellulhchicken
2009-06-05 . chapter 7
it would be nice to see this finished or at leased continued
Irokoii
2008-12-29 . chapter 7
What an astounding piece! This piece delves into speculative philosophy on a very sophisticated level without boring even once. Your development of magical concepts is far and away better than the conceptions Dian Wynn Jones has written about. I liked the way you transitioned between the "realms of existence" for lack of a better term, far better than hers. Yours are much simpler to visualize. Even more amazing you managed fit in just the right amount of humor for such a highly cerebral work.

Bravo!
shinigami
2007-07-01 . chapter 1
You've made a dissertion about magic, souls, physics and philosphy (a feat in and of itself) and somehow embedded a ranma 1/2 comedic adventure into it. and it WORKS. the textbook becomes interesting. my god, do you realize the fortune you could make if you could make a real world textbook as interesting as your interludes made cologne's lectures? People would ENJOY reading about physics and whatnot.
but apart from that 1. KEEP WRITING THIS 2. Leave your format as it is (i've read the entire thing, this isn't a review of chapter 1) 3. what about gosugenki what has he been doing wrong, or is it just that since that IS his normal behavior he hasn't actually set a place aside (it would be amusing if he were magically inert) 4. was it Nekoken (the sum of all the nekoken spirits) or CAT (working on the behalf of nekoken) who helped nabiki or was it a potential benefactor
yellulhchicken
2007-06-18 . chapter 5
hnn this is probably the 5th time ive read this. I was wondering, this story is pretty good if a bit wordy and deep for many fanfic readers. still why not finish it?
Laniac67
2006-07-17 . chapter 7
I'm impressed. Not many stories started as script form evolve into prose of this quality. Update soon, even if it's just to say that this story is still alive.

On a completely unrelated note: A SESAME STREET cameo? o.0
dragon-game
2006-06-21 . chapter 7
Good story.
Please continue it soon.
Sotek
2005-03-12 . chapter 7
Very nice. A few pieces of grammar error, but some proofreading could fix it, I think.

I'd love to see more; the metaphysics was fascinating.
wolf-in-hell
2005-02-20 . chapter 7
great story so far, and i'm glad that you switched away from script format. is there going to be any more to this story? if not you should mark it Abandoned.
Chris
2005-01-15 . chapter 7
I like it a lot - the venture into metaphysics is fascinating, and the story is fun.

As far as grammar and such go, only the occasional act of apostrophe abuse was distracting to me, and not really particularly significantly. It's not anything to lose sleep over, but it couldn't much hurt to clean it up either, possibly via pre-readers.

Another issue in other reviews, the expository or 'lecture-like' dialogue, simply didn't bother me - it was mostly used in the parts that, well, weren't really story after all, and to what I felt was very good effect. More natural dialogue or storytelling might distract from the topic at hand, and simple description without a dialogue would be over-dry for casual reading.
dogbertcarroll
2004-08-04 . chapter 7
More?
dogbertcarroll
2004-08-04 . chapter 6
*blink*
dogbertcarroll
2004-08-04 . chapter 5
"It's most offensive. it should be `In Godiva Memoriam!' And the
proportions are all wrong!"

LOL!
dogbertcarroll
2004-08-04 . chapter 4
Great chapter. Loved Dr. Tashikaha!

Great ending too!
dogbertcarroll
2004-08-04 . chapter 2
Something like Kasumi entering the living room
with a loaded uzi.

LOL!

Loved the plaque.
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