Errr, this can't be the end, right? * looks hopefull *

I like how you've started your story and the line "Oh, Billy, I'm a girl, as if being subhuman wasn't enough. Let's be friends," made me giggle. Awesome. xD

Edie's cruelty with the DVD threat had an almost sadistic edge to it, no wonder Mortimer wants to form an alliance!

I wonder if Edie will go for the offer, or if Mortimer's going to find his own means of escape. Perhaps that's where Melody will come into play? Then again, my predictions for these are terrible. I have a joke theory about Agatha being a GI programmed droid, built to infultrate the resistance while the real Agatha's locked up somewhere. Lol, like that's likely! Ag's got too fight in her to allow that- And I'm commenting about the wrong story, aren't I? Haha!

Great writing, for both! Can hardly wait for the next exciting twist you'll pull,

-Bablet

Good to see that folks are writing decently entertaining fics about the endearing Commander Keen. This has a fairly imaginative plot, even if Mortimer's incarceration was extremely abrupt, and atypically real world issues such as Edie's imminent move fit surprisingly well into the Keen milieu. There's no apparent direction to the plot yet, but that only adds to the anticipation of future chapters, as I do get the sense that you know what you're doing.

You dig quite illuminatingly into Mortimer's character, giving him a bit of human weakness without losing the series's lighthearted tone. His relentlessness somehow endues him with both menace and charm. Billy doesn't come off as well, though; he's perfectly in character, but his mannerisms don't come through as distinctly Billy Blaze.

Edie seems to be handled well... I'm not familiar with her, but I haven't played Aliens Ate My Babysitter or Keen Dreams. Anyway, this is a quite promising adventure on the whole, and I look forward to seeing it develop.