Good Job! There are a few spelling errors though...

Ohhh mannn! I see a very twisty plot coming in! This sounds really good, I can't wait till you update again! UPDATE SOON!:D

I cracked up when Lars started talking. He's got pretty nice man breasts ahaha! Great chapter! (:

Great first chapter, you did a pretty great job with describing the situation! I really like your character so far, she seems pretty gnarly (:

This is a really good chapter! But why is it rated T?

Good but WAY to short.