Merrol has good insight. Good job throwing out just bits about his background. :D

Good. You keep this story moving right along :) I like how your details add to the perception that this takes place in a futuristic society, and I like the character Merrol. And the line "one of the men threw up on his neighbor in a cascade of watery leftovers" made me lol.

Awesome :) I love how you got right into the action. Good job describing everything. Pretty good dialogue (although make sure they don't talk too formally) :)