did you just let ranma asked akane to be with him or did you mean like being married if so please continue this story it has alot of potential to evolve.

Hah! had to reread that 2nd last line twice to catch what he really meant, and maybe it would have been funny if he said "living in sin" normaly, but it was one of the things the guys at school told him that he didn't understand. Of course, you'd have to add a line or two more to make it clear to the readers he doesn't understand what he's asking, but it could still be funny.

Generally the reader has to think about Ranma's last line for a bit to realise this, but that's actually really romantic, at least coming from him and his limited grasp of relationships. I wouldn't mind seeing this continue a bit farther, though I admit it's punchier ended here.

Excellent history. But perhaps you must put the last What? on cappitals.

What is AHO?

Kinai.

Damn! I HAVE read your stuff before! Serves me right for remembering the titles before the authors. I have you on the top of my list of current favorite Ranma fanfiction authors.

The only real consistant critique I have for you is finish it! I don't care what story I'm talking about; just finish it! FINISH IT FINISH IT FINISH IT!

Sound like a nagging parent, don't I?

Your ideas are great. Your skills in language use and grammer and story pacing very commendable. The only jarring part is that your Ranma is consistantly brighter/socially adept than Takahashi's, but hey! That's fanfiction. I'm going to spend the evening browsing your stories. (I speed read) I probably won't comment again, though unless something really catches my eye. Have fun.

I have only one thing to say...

THIS STORY HAS TOO MUCH POTENTIAL TO BE LEFT IN THIS STATE! IT BEGS, NO DEMANDS TO BE CONTINUED!

This has been a mesage from your friendly neighborhood Ranma Otaku. Had this been an actual fan fic emergency this message would have been followed by Akane and Skuld emerging from the your video monitor and delivering a good old Mallot-sama smack to your nice round head. :-)

This review is brought to you by "Lack of Sleep", when you can't think straight enough to send the very best.

Interesting way to finish. Not entirely sure if that serves as a benchmark of you overall preference to which pairing should win out.

Be interesting to see in your other works. I have to go now as the hour grows late.

Good luck & best wishes,

Hououza

Yeah, the ending reminds me of nothing so much as Robert A Heinlein's propaganda grenade from Starship Troopers. Remember? After blowing up buildings with their mortars and bazooka's the troops jump through a crowd and drop the little audio player that announces, "I'm a thirty-second bomb! 29... 28..."

The ending was like that. With such a perfect conclusion, how could you spoil it by making the story any longer? Particularly with Akane's great end sentance: "RANMA NO - what?"

Wow, that was great! Despite the other reviews for this, I think the insult thing was genius (what were you guys thinking? the repeativeness was the point!) and I LOVE the ending! Very intelligent!

-Cherry

Hehe. Not what I'd call a WAFF fanfic but it was cute nonetheless! A question though: didn't they feel a little stupid repeating those two insults for so many times? I guess if I had actually *seen* something like this on tv I wouldn't have stopped laughing for days!

i think it means getting married to her.

Yeah the last part was kind of confussing, I don't think you have to make it a lemon, but it does need to be explained. It's good, but using the same insults, it kind of got annoying. So if ya please make an other chapter. -_-x

Could be me, but...ah...i didn't get the last bit that Ranma said...hmm...it's good though...but wouldn't repeating the same insults make the others suspicious about what RA are doing?

lol cute start to a story...im wondering how the next chapter will come out? _

Oh interesting! Please continue! *Maura*

kyra: WOW! ranma uses his brain for once!

Ranma 1:(glare) are you saying my ranma is stupid?

kyra:..uh

Ranma lover: (deadly glare)HOW DARE YOU INSULT MY RANMA

kyra:...uh

Ranma's little flower:(insane evil glare of death) DIE YOU EVIL BEING

kyra: (sweatdrops)i take it you didn't like my review