It was good! They said exactly what their characters would allow them to say. I didn't like the ending, though. Holo's willingness to kiss Lawerance just to lick out a few crumbs just takes away the mystery. It's not even a good reason. Overall, good job :)

Perfect! Just magnificent! Marvelous!

But seriously though, this was wonderful. One of those rare Spice and Wolf fanfictions that actually capture Holo and Lawrence's personalities perfectly, along with the dialogue they exchange, which is no easy feat.

And that make-out scene at the end. Priceless. My eyes glanced over some of the words when I was reading the part before that and I was thinking:

"Oh crap, another random kissing scene."

But you actually managed to pull it off in a way that's funny, entertaining and actually makes sense! The post-kiss expression of Lawrence and the last sentence of the story perfectly portray the two's different thought processes. It actually took me by surprise how well you wrote that segment. Once again excellent job.

Thank you for writing such a great story. I sincerely hope you write more on Spice and Wolf.

Sayonara

hey cool story are you going to continue this

Excellent vocabulary and sentence structure! Plus, everything flowed really well. Please, continue making more stories!

Clearly you watch scrubs. Let me call the Janitor so that he and Holo may beat up on lawreance. Unless you did not get this from scrubs,in which I take that back. Also, you need to do better of describing Holo and Lawreance. We all know what they look like. As for the make out scene, I will say you did better then I. Other wise, keep writing.