I really likes the chapter! Hope you can update soon. Love the character interaction.

Enjoyed this chap! The boys were well written and in character. Also liked the descriptions in the diff scenes. Really looking forward to more!

Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii!

cbks

Love it!

Obviously.

I love the sound of Ava in the morning, she sounds exactly like me!

Oh, and thank you for taking my advice into account for how to start it, that made me feel so happy!

And that whole thing with her wallpaper; story of my life. I'm desperate to change my wallpaper, it's so desperately childish and I'm not allowed to change it until I'm at least 18 :'(

That's why I've taken to plastering the whole thing with posters ;)

Anyhoooooooooooo

Oh my gosh, Ava and Sherlock; the funniest thing ever! Poor Ava, she's having such a hard time with Sherlock, isn't she? Poor girl.

And John being rebelious, wow! I can't believe he was so firm with Sherlock and refused to get his phone for him, that was great! And the "Oh Lord. Not two of you." I don't have the funniest what that means, but I can't wait to find out! And I can just imagine EXACTLY how he would say that! Lolz!

"...lethargy running like syrup through my veins"

Loving that line so much I feel like another keyboard smash!

Beautiful imagery there m'a dear! Lines like this make me feel like I'm really there with her, it's amazing!

"Sugar?"

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I laughed so much at that bit my sides hurt! Brilliant one Zara! Oh my gosh...

"I finally manage to get out an annoyed sounding 'please'." Oh Sherlock, he never changes. Beautifully in character there, darling!

"I reach my door and hesitate. I knock, don't I? That's what people do." Is it just me, or did you perhaps steal that last little line from someone? As it happens, I was just watching that part on youtube. I could be wrong, but I'm fairly sure I'm not. I mean, Zara, this is you we're discussing here. Not that I'm complaining of course.

"I look up then, at the exact same time as Sherlock, and, in unison, we question, "Pardon?"" Oh my gosh, best line ever! Absolutely loving your sense of humour honey, it's classic!

Can't wait for the next chapter, this is one of the best stories I've ever read on fanfiction! Just sayin'. Live sweetheart, live.

Love you!

A

Terrible? No way! It's great :) Ava is just like me in the morning...

I loved this chapter :) Thanks for updating, I was getting desperate :) You're awesome at John's POV! Fav part:

"But why my bed? Why not your bed?"

"You're missing the point entirely."

"I'm really not."

"You really are."

It soundedso much like them!

Hey Zara! Well, what can I say. Where to begin. Firstly, je suis thanking you muchly for the lovely chapter! Please update soon, I'm really enjoying this so far! However, be warned m'a dear. If you make me cry at any point in this story, you WILL pay for it. And you already know my unique method of paying you back for being an awesome writer, I'm sure. Lol! Sorry I didn't say much more than "This is really good" last night, I had a lot on my mind. Which has been put to rest now, thank goodness, due mainly to you of course :) *gives you a massive hug of thanks* tee hee, sorry if I squeeze you to death, it wasn't intended. I'm a bad person. But at least I don't make a habit of promising people that I'll cut them up whilst they're lying on the ground dying :P But never mind that just now, you're probably more interested in a review than my meaningless chatter. Soooooooo... Love it! I could completely see what was happening whilst reading these two chapters, and you NEARLY made me cry in the first chapter. But not quite. :P. I feel really sorry for Ava (which, by the way, is an epic name!) because she's just so sweet and lovely, and I bet she's really beautiful, but yet she has to have all of these horrible things happening to her that she really doesn't deserve, and then on top of that, the poor girl has to deal with Sherlock Holmes as a temporary flatmate. Lovely. Much as I love him, I think being in the same place as him for a considerable length of time would irritate me to death. Maybe. Also, your writing was very poetic in places and very beautiful, and I think you've already nailed the characters'personalities! And how can I possibly not thank you for naming the second chapter 'bed sheets'. Naturally, that fact drew me in instantly. Not my fault. You're exactly the same m'a dear, and you know it :P I really particularly liked the bit when Ava was running away from the men; your vocabulary was very impressive! Naturally. AND I seem to remember you writing the word 'flurry' somewhere :D That can only be a good thing! But I'll leave you alone now before I bore you to death - I must be good at that, especially when I'm bored, since I did mention that I chatter more when I'm bored - I'm supposed to be revising for art anyway. But I got bored. Which is why I'm writing this review now rather than later, and I was just in the mood for talking to you. So, before my dad drags me off by the ear, I'll just disappear now. Toodle pip! Luv ya! :DDDDDDDDD

A

Interesting story so far. Looking forward to more.

Great chapter and welcome back!

I really like this, it's very good. Very gripping beginning, and ava seems like a very strong character. Keep on writing this :)

I can't properly express how much I love this :) Suffice to say, I do. Please keep on writing this. I'm proud of you :)

I love it, I can't wait to find out more! :D