I love this story but you stopped updating . I hope you come back to update.

"I had a reason." - what? solaire has motive to kill someone? you cannot just stop updating after this, it is cruel.

OSWALD! did not see that coming! ahh this story is so great! you wouldn't mind terriibly if i drew some fanart for your story? maybe like some short comic stuff? i dont have a account but hers my tumblr:

you're gonna finish this right?

also solaire Gwyn's first born? I've seen that idea all over the place, and the way you described him made him seem to favor Gwynevere which would be just awesome. XD i think ill have to draw a family picture.

Ahh spoke to soon, lautrec for the win, XD i think you nailed griggs character. More sun bro plz.

Love this! Cant wait to read what happens next, i really love the way you write solaire! But no lautrec? Shame

Please continue making these, they are great!

Let's hope Rhea get's out of this... I know this is agaisnt the theme of Dark souls, but a happy ending would do nice...

form i meant not for

You are quite good for this being your first English fan-fiction i cannot wait for the next update there are quite a few spelling errors or using the wrong for of a word but it is easy to understand what you meant good job and please keep up the good work

A few rough sentences here an there. Mainly across the fic mistaking your/you're and than/then.

Separate more the paragraphs. a few of them are huge walls of text. Otherwise I'm liking it so far.

Good story I only see one problem... Why doesn't she use the bonfires to upgrade her soul level?

Hey, A good chapter, nice detail on the Asylum demon. At a few point your english was a bit awkward for example

"Looking down, she saw hundreds of meters down the ground"

maybe some thing like

Looking down she saw the ground, hundreds of meters below.

but, I'm liking it, so keep going.